5 thoughts on “Title? That´s for the weak

  1. thanks for the chapter

    many spiritualist´s worthless corpses piled up.

    spiritualist’s -> spiritualists’

    “Just because these guys were spiritualists from the Barusak, this is simply jumping into conclusions.”

    jumping into conclusions -> jumping to conclusions

    “But from what we´ve gathered of information from them,

    change to something else, like:
    But from the information we’ve gathered from them,
    But from what we’ve gathered from them,

    didn´t the people you caught forget the color her hair

    color her hair -> color of her hair

    which would stand out even with darkness of the night.

    with darkness -> with the darkness

    Thanks for the hard work ,your Excellency

    work ,your -> work, your

    Gortoberuk´s request, the interrogator became overturned

    Gortoberuk’s request, -> At Gortoberuk’s request,

    Did you understand?

    Did -> Do

    If that was what it was going to happen, it is more convenient for her to just call herself Barusak.

    need to match the tenses in both halves of the sentence, like:
    If that was what was going to happen, it was more convenient for her to just call herself Barusak.

    It made one wonder where his usual full of might disappeared to.

    Use usual as an adjective here, the only time anyone ever uses it as a noun is when it’s prefaced with the word ‘the’ as in, ‘the usual.’
    So add another word like
    It made one wonder where his usual personality full of might disappeared to.
    It made one wonder where his usual demeanor full of might disappeared to.
    It made one wonder where his usual bearing full of might disappeared to.

    Umu, your next duty has been.

    missing a word
    Umu, your next duty has been decided.
    Umu, your next duty has been assigned.

    You just need to accompany her from a certain distance and just prepare for unprecedented situations.

    only need the word ‘just’ once.
    You just need to accompany her from a certain distance and prepare for unprecedented situations.

    It´s fine if I just stay next to Charlotte-sama all the times.

    all the times -> at all times.

    I will be looking forward for your performance

    looking forward for your performance -> looking forward to your performance

    but since he had told her to go start the preparations of her next task

    preparations of her -> preparations for her

    she decided it was better for her to leave the room once for all

    once for all -> once and for all

    Lowering her head on more last time

    Change to either
    Lowering her head one last time
    Lowering her head one more time

    The old general shut down his eyes

    shut down his eyes -> shut his eyes

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    • Too, scary…. This wall of text will reach the heavens…;-;

      It´s kind of funny how often that thing about the text being one word lacking for it to be completed because I forgot to write it happens… I wonder why¬¬

      By the way, about the “lowering her head one last time”. Why is it wrong to put one last time? After you stated that, it felt a bit off to me, but I just couldn´t figure out why…

      Ah, I really need to edit my chapters earlier :/ It has no meaning if the edition comes one whole day after its release…

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  2. Thank you for the latest chapter! 😀

    It’s a shame that the majority of the demons still don’t trust her though. 😦 I wonder what will happen to the traitor demon. O_O

    Also, the link for the previous chapter, chapter 18, posted on the front of your home page doesn’t work; It only leads back to the homepage when clicked. The kniL.

    Can’t for the next chapter. >_<

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